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Fertile Ground
#1
ALL:  Here's one for your critique on how we might improve it.  Thanks!  Neil

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Fertile Ground
 
Words: Neil Sleevi & Dan Simmons
Music : Dan Simmons
 
Verse 1:
 
Jesus told about the farmer
Who went out into the field
Sowing seeds in expectation
Planning for a harvest yield
Some seed fell along the wayside
Where the path was hard and worn
And the birds swept down to steal it
The seed was quickly gone
 
Verse 2:
 
Then He spoke of stony places
Of shallow roots in shallow ground
Lacking depth those plants were withered
As the summer sun bore down
Some seed fell in thorny places
And it sprouted from the ground
But the thorns choked any traces
And the fruit was never found
 
Chorus:
 
But there is rich, deep soil… in the heart of fertile ground 
And the seed is firmly planted… where the grace of God abounds
O, the branches stretch t’ward heaven and the roots reach deeply down
The fruit grows in abundance…in a heart of fertile ground
 
There is rich, deep soil… in a heart of fertile ground 
Where the Word is firmly planted… the Spirit will abound
O, the branches stretch t’ward heaven and the roots reach deeply down
The fruit grows in abundance… in a heart of fertile ground
The fruit grows in abundance …in a heart...of fertile...ground
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#2
Great job Neil.......2nd verse is spot on....

I really like how you went 2 verses then to double Chorus & never come back to a verse.....

Nice work to get some different structure on a song & it fits this tune perfectly....
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#3
(05-22-2017, 04:19 PM)Steve A Wrote: Great job Neil.......2nd verse is spot on....

I really like how you went 2 verses then to double Chorus & never come back to a verse.....

Nice work to get some different structure on a song & it fits this tune perfectly....


Steve,  Thanks for comments......

Blessings,

Neil
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#4
Beautiful song, I really enjoyed this, so mellow. No critique needed!!
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